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since : 05-19-06, id: 1049571
Author has written 1 story | Harry Potter.
β : Sarah Alisa Perne is a ed beta reader and is currently accepting beta reading requests.
Beta Description
Beta Bio: general description as a beta reader
As a beta-reader, I will expect to be improving anything that you submit to me. I am very ionate about writing so when I edit a piece I'll be looking at characterization and plot automatically while keeping in mind sentence beginning variation(not using I, I, I for every beginning in a sentence-redundant), transitions(Additionally, However, In conclusion, Moreover), and syntax(how everything is put together overall). Particularly, I am super strict about sentence fluency, dialogue punctuation, transitions, word choice(am I going to walk or am I going to scramble, stalk, flail, climb my way somewhere?), and most of all the creative/imagination aspect of any story. The types of things I normally ask myself when editing another persons work goes a little bit like this:br /br /br /br /br /br /

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My Strengths: beta, writing, or reading strengths
Punctuation(of dialogue), imagination, poetry:rhyming, poetry:meter, word choice, grammar, transitions, sentence beginning variation, sentence fluency,spelling, syntax, organization, details, imagery.
My Weaknesses: beta, writing, or reading weaknesses
Can be very strict about spelling, transitions, word choice, and how everything flows. Manga/Anime type pieces aren't my best area but I could always help if you need someone impartial.
Preferred: types of stories I prefer over others
Harry Potter, Any type of fiction.
Would Rather Not: I do not beta for these stories
Nothing. Throw it at me.
Beta Preferences
Language: English
Content Rating: Fiction K » M
Categories: categories in black are ones this beta has authored for
Book A Series of Unfortunate Events
Book Child Thief
 Book Ella Enchanted
Book Harry Potter
 Book Molly Moon series
Book Vampire Academy
Genres: genres in black are ones this beta has authored for
General
Romance
Humor
Drama
 Poetry
Adventure
Mystery
Horror
 Parody
Angst
Supernatural
Suspense
 Fantasy
Tragedy
Hurt/Comfort
Friendship